I think I love you. I'd fallen behind on Inevitable and had just finished catching up about two days ago. Then you updated again. *sighs happily*
Wow. It's been nearly a year. Freaky. Here's too a long and fruitful shelf life.
The meeting with the Weasleys was interesting. Intriguing. I'd wondered why Gred and Forge hadn't been in their shop when you mentioned it. And the fact that the three Weasleys hadn't gone up to Harry to say goodbye, yet watched him with Anita...hmm... Has Dumbledore said anything to anyone about Harry's circumstance? Wouldn't he need to inform key members of the Order of the Phoenix of Harry's recent developments? (must check that chapter with Dumbledore again, I think. My memory doesn't serve me well enough, it seems)
Also, Elsa? I do like her. I don't know why, but she's all sorts of awesome. It's the snark, the bitchiness. She counters Anita's holier-than-thou attitude perfectly. I loved the part where Harry gives Anita the submissive werewolf greeting. Naughty boy, especially since he's an alpha. *smirk*
There are a few spelling and grammatical errors in this, but otherwise it's perfectly perfect in every way. *grin*
I had to smile at them at the sight of them.
Did you forget a comma, or did you repeat a few words?
"I told him to leave everything in his suitcases night
and whisperer. That's all I caught on the second reading, I'm not sure if I missed anything that I'd caught during the first reading. I was just skimming the second time.
Now for some thoughts: Wonder what Elsa's trauma with Jean-Claude is. Although it sounds personal. And an image of Jean-Claude connected in a sexual way to a girl who looks twelve/thirteen is just a little scary.
I noticed that while Anita constantly refers to Elsa as "girl", Harry referred to her as "woman". Is he more open minded, therefore more accepting, than Anita? Does he realise that she's older than she looks and therefore had adjusted his thinking?
One little thing I was wondering about. In chapter 44, you said that Christoff was gradually gaining power throughout of England. And in this chapter, you've revealed that Christoff hasn't specified from what he'd protect Anita and Harry from, so would that mean that Christoff would be obliged to involve his people in the Wizarding World's fight against Voldemort? And if so, wouldn't Elsa's point about the humans targeting vampires and wererats prove to be moot?
I just have to say again. I love Elsa. I don't know why, but I do. Fantastic chapter.
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Wow. It's been nearly a year. Freaky. Here's too a long and fruitful shelf life.
The meeting with the Weasleys was interesting. Intriguing. I'd wondered why Gred and Forge hadn't been in their shop when you mentioned it. And the fact that the three Weasleys hadn't gone up to Harry to say goodbye, yet watched him with Anita...hmm... Has Dumbledore said anything to anyone about Harry's circumstance? Wouldn't he need to inform key members of the Order of the Phoenix of Harry's recent developments? (must check that chapter with Dumbledore again, I think. My memory doesn't serve me well enough, it seems)
Also, Elsa? I do like her. I don't know why, but she's all sorts of awesome. It's the snark, the bitchiness. She counters Anita's holier-than-thou attitude perfectly. I loved the part where Harry gives Anita the submissive werewolf greeting. Naughty boy, especially since he's an alpha. *smirk*
There are a few spelling and grammatical errors in this, but otherwise it's perfectly perfect in every way. *grin*
I had to smile at them at the sight of them.
Did you forget a comma, or did you repeat a few words?
"I told him to leave everything in his suitcases night
and whisperer. That's all I caught on the second reading, I'm not sure if I missed anything that I'd caught during the first reading. I was just skimming the second time.
Now for some thoughts: Wonder what Elsa's trauma with Jean-Claude is. Although it sounds personal. And an image of Jean-Claude connected in a sexual way to a girl who looks twelve/thirteen is just a little scary.
I noticed that while Anita constantly refers to Elsa as "girl", Harry referred to her as "woman". Is he more open minded, therefore more accepting, than Anita? Does he realise that she's older than she looks and therefore had adjusted his thinking?
One little thing I was wondering about. In chapter 44, you said that Christoff was gradually gaining power throughout of England. And in this chapter, you've revealed that Christoff hasn't specified from what he'd protect Anita and Harry from, so would that mean that Christoff would be obliged to involve his people in the Wizarding World's fight against Voldemort? And if so, wouldn't Elsa's point about the humans targeting vampires and wererats prove to be moot?
I just have to say again. I love Elsa. I don't know why, but I do. Fantastic chapter.