ext_2564 ([identity profile] windmiran.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] mhalachai 2007-03-22 03:16 am (UTC)

Yay! So soon after chapter 10 - you'll overdose those of us who are addicted. (Not that you should ever, ever stop.)
I like the contrast/friction between Jason and Nathaniel's realities. And I love all the throwaway comments from Anya and the rest of Dawn's history from Buffy gets so much more weight given to it in Anitaland.
Also, when Nathaniel's putting the present from Jean-Claude under the tree, it should be "If there was a gift offered, he wasn't going to make her jump through hoops to get it," not 'hops'.

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