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mhalachai ([personal profile] mhalachai) wrote2005-08-02 08:55 pm
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Inevitable 26: Why Is No One Listening To Me?

That noise y'all hear is me cheering that this chapter is done! I typed over 6,000 words today. Again, loves the vacation.

Inevitable Twenty-Six: Why Is No One Listening To Me? is posted.

At TTH
(and if TTH is broken:)
At Pomme de Sang
At Skyehawke


As usual, feel free to comment on anything. I love comments. Of all sizes.

Things I learned in the process of writing this chapter:
-There's an hour less sunlight at this time of year in St. Louis, compared with Vancouver.
-I was strongly tempted to use "British" words for breakfast food, but knew I'd just show the world what a goober I am, so Harry's eating bacon this morning.
-Capslock!Harry is fun to write.

[identity profile] semirose.livejournal.com 2005-08-03 04:31 am (UTC)(link)
Aww, Anita's Nathaniel's doll, that's adorable. And Harry and Anita have real interaction rather than Anita being a)bossy or b)in the middle of a breakdown. This was such a nice chapter, very enjoyable.

Capslock!Harry is fun to write.
hee, I know, although Capslock!Lily is a lot of fun too.

School's In?

(Anonymous) 2005-08-03 06:38 am (UTC)(link)
Between Anita and Richard, I think poor Harry's going to look forward to having to deal with Hermione nag him about working harder on his schoolwork. I honestly can see them (as Ulfric and Lupa) laying down the law that no werewolf (assuming, of course, that Harry's become a lycanthrope) in *this* pack is going to have such a poor education. I wonder how long before Harry's ready to get his GED?

(And, even if Harry isn't becoming a lycanthrope, you can see Anita using her position as "master (vampiric) guardian" to make sure that Harry gets a good Muggle education. With a strong emphasis on physical fitness (martial arts, anyone?) and preternatural lore/law.)

While Harry was in denial (about a need to prove things, at least to himself) in the last chapter, here we have have Anita taking a scenic river trip in Egypt. I somehow doubt that Anita reacted well when Manny tried to protect her, back when she was his (unofficial?) apprentice. Likewise, the idea of doing something semi-stupid in a relatively controlled environment, so you would know if you could do it if your life depended on it... No, Anita would *never* do something like that! ^_^

As you yourself pointed out in a previous journal entry, Anita and Harry are very much alike. (A fact that good old Edward will no doubt bring up, and find a great deal of amusement in.)

BTW, did you get my email to you about Chapter 25?

The Apprentice.

[identity profile] samira-86.livejournal.com 2005-08-03 07:23 am (UTC)(link)
Once again, another incredible chapter. I just wonder when Anita is going to kill, beat, or wound someone. I miss seeing that particular aspect of her. When do you think you will post another one? (Hopefully very soon, pretty please.)

[identity profile] sabriel-0405.livejournal.com 2005-08-03 04:54 pm (UTC)(link)
This was a great chapter on lots of levels. I love his relationship with Jason and Nathaniel. In this chapter, even in Harry's POV, we were really seeing Nathaniel happy at having a brother because Harry is that to him. A friend but more. A younger brother.

Anita is still so fragile. She hates that feeling, hates being out of control. She has intimacy issues even when she's willing and able to be physically intimate. Now, it's all cascading down around her. Ronnie's contribution was interesting and, I think, more jealousy based than anything else. (It was great that Harry answered the door shirtless.) It's a riot to watch Nathaniel play Dress-up Barbie with his life-sized Anita. Jean-Claude does the same thing. No wonders she's always feeling trapped! (Detractors comment on change of attire but don't seem to realize the reason for it.) (By the way, the word you were looking for in the post-Ronnie discussion was polyamorous.)

I can't wait for the next chapter. This story deserves every accolade it gets and more!

[identity profile] zed42.livejournal.com 2005-08-03 04:54 pm (UTC)(link)
someone mentioned it above, but i'm going to say it anyway: you do a good job of capturing anita's "i must protect everyone because they can't protect themselves" streak, even if they _can_ protect themselves... the fact is, with his magic, harry can probably kick the ass of almost anyone in the cast six ways to sunday... it's just that he's going through some minor changes, and he doesn't have his usual support system around to help him deal with that and the "regular" stress of someone trying to kill him...

if anita ever manages to let someone fend for themselves once in a while, it'll be a miracle.... it seems that the only people acting like adults in the anita universe are jean-claude and rafael... :)

[identity profile] lishel_fracrium.livejournal.com 2005-08-03 08:33 pm (UTC)(link)
ummm I love this and I reveiwed but here's a question will there be any slash or a Harry pairing of any type?

[identity profile] penyn-1600.livejournal.com 2005-08-03 10:20 pm (UTC)(link)
Anita is so going to give Jean Claude hell for what he did with Harry. And Ronnie, jeez. She's either jealous of Anita or more conservative than she thinks to be so casually judgemental.