FIC: Inevitable 32: Hold the Line

[mhalachai]

As per your request:

Inevitable 32: Hold the Line is up!

At TTH
At Pomme de Sang
At Skyehawke

Please, all comments are welcome. We're beginning to go in a new direction in the fic. Let me know what you think!

Comments

[deepfishy.livejournal.com]

*very* interesting...and I can see why you were having trouble controlling angst!Harry when you wrote this. His life sucks.

At that moment, I knew I'd be okay.
It was such a relief to read that, and know that Anita's finally bounced back :)

I like where this is going, and when you finish all the other updates you want to write, I'll be looking forward to the next chapter.

And, Harry's room looked like the Box Fairy had come in the middle of the night and exploded. Hee!

[sabriel-0405.livejournal.com]

Interesting. Very interesting. Real growth for Harry, not in the sexual awakening but in a very real stamp of mortality. I loved how Anita's protective instincts went into overdrive. She has mixed feelings about Harry, but he is one of hers. You really are incredible. (By the way, Micah's last name doesn't have a g.)

[child-labor.livejournal.com]

[(Anonymous)]

One grammar error noted:

Box Fairy had come in the middle of the night and exploded. He'd had vanished so quickly.

This chapter was very interesting. It seems like the story's gearing up for another deluge of events. The narration said that the crew was feeling subdued, and the actions and dialogue showed that; It's amzing to see authors minimalize words for greater impact and oumph. I enjoyed how you linked the last sentence of this chapter to the previous chapter and, by doing so, pushed home what was bothering Harry all day.

On another note, HARRY IS GOING TO BE RAISING THE DEAD? WHEN DID HE TRY BEFORE? <"Now that's just not true," I contradicted. "You helped me with that zombie the other day." > What chapter was that? I remember Harry accompanying Anita to the office, but when did he help with the actual raising? Now I'll have to scan through the chapters to find it...*groan*.

E.A.V.

[clare009.livejournal.com]

Ooh excellent chapter as usual. I love that Anita has taken Harry under her wing and is going to be teaching him some stuff they don't talk about at Hogwarts. The boy needs all the help he can get.

On the *cough* sexual awakening of Harry note, I must admit that I really feel a whole Harry/Nathaniel vibe going on. Not sure why - I'm not usually a slashy girl, but, um, yeah...

[(Anonymous)]

Loved it. Though for some reason it seemed so... short. I find that the story is taking a different turn and that your writing style has for lack of a better word changed a litte. Nothing drastic but still a change (I can tell people apart from their writing style quite well; I know, creepy).

On a different note I hope you can update switchback next *hint hint cough cough wink wink nudge nudge* ;D

[lishel_fracrium.livejournal.com]

*bounces* You updated. Thank you! so I guess this means that you are or thinking about pairing harry up with ginny? or not who knows? either way this story rocks!

[houses7177.livejournal.com]

Yay, I got to read the updates! In short, loving it- loving Dumbles and Anita and Harry and all their myriad issues. Harry's really coming alive in the face of death, isn't he? Like you commented above, a marked man can do anything- and Harry is no exception. He didn't seem overly whiny at all, the right touch of concern and distress, but still that indomitable Harry Spirit.

This was most excellent- and read smoothly. I, too, initially thought that you were indicating that Harry would raise zombies. I see what you mean now, but the phrasing is very indicative of him actually raising the zombies.

[thymidinekinase.livejournal.com]

Hi. So pleased that you've written another installment. It seemed like a transition chapter. I'm glad Harry and Anita are getting some rest between crises, but I'm definitely ready for some more action. I noticed one grammar error at the end: I thought I saw a shadow passed over Harry's face.

Was Anita actually being ... tactful and manipulative? At the same time [Blinks] I haven't read the books in a while, but that seems a little out of character.

Looking forward to more, though!

Omg.

[(Anonymous)]

First off, I love your story. I'll be checking for updates on Inevitable a LOT. and its partly inspired me to write my own HP/AB crossover... provided I can find some AB stuff. So yea, keep writing, and, well, Good, GOOD fic. Keep it up.
-Spike

[stealthyshade.livejournal.com]

Once, again, I love this story.
-Spike