FIC: Inevitable 32: Hold the Line

[mhalachai]

As per your request:

Inevitable 32: Hold the Line is up!

At TTH
At Pomme de Sang
At Skyehawke

Please, all comments are welcome. We're beginning to go in a new direction in the fic. Let me know what you think!

Comments

[(Anonymous)]

Loved it. Though for some reason it seemed so... short. I find that the story is taking a different turn and that your writing style has for lack of a better word changed a litte. Nothing drastic but still a change (I can tell people apart from their writing style quite well; I know, creepy).

On a different note I hope you can update switchback next *hint hint cough cough wink wink nudge nudge* ;D

[mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com]

Though for some reason it seemed so... short.
It was over 5,000 words. Not overly short. About 12 pages. But yeah, it does read really quickly.

I find that the story is taking a different turn and that your writing style has for lack of a better word changed a litte.

*is very curious* How do you think? Can you give me some examples? I have my own thoughts on this, but would like to hear your comments.

switchback
That's in the queue, let me tell you :) But first, I must finish Different Eyes. But soon on SB, soon.

[(Anonymous)]

12 pages?! Wow, that didn't read like 12 pages but my Microsoft word says 12 pages too.... I read too fast for my good.

I read over it again and I think the biggest difference is the detail writing.In the first 20-26 chapters details were very frequent. Sometimes un-needed but they were there and it didn'thurt the story. Now the details are still there but not quite as many. The details that are there now are shorter more precise.
Your grammar has improved a bit over the thirty-two chapters as well. I think this is the one that I noticed first. Sometimes I love my english class.
Overall your writing style has changed just a tiny amount. It sounds moreconfident and a bit more mature.

[mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com]

I know what you mean about reading too fast. I got through HBP in one day with time to spare.

You know how crazy I am? When I read your first comment, I was worried that my writing had gone downhill. *is nuts*.

Even though I posted this at the beginning of the year, I began writing it in August, 2004. Since then, I've taken to writing a little bit at least every night, to keep my brain working. I think the old adage of "practice makes perfect" will apply in this case.

It sounds moreconfident and a bit more mature

Thank you :)