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I said I was going to have this up by Friday. I lied. Please don't kill me after you've read it.

Inevitable Sixty: To Sleep, Perchance To Dream
by Mhalachai
Disclaimer: Laurell K. Hamilton owns all things Anita Blake. J.K. Rowling owns all things Harry Potter. Only the story is my own.
Note: As a reminder, the first-person point of view is Anita; third-person-limited point of view is Harry.

Previous parts here.

Warning: This chapter contains scenes of implied and explicit violence and disturbing imagery. Please recall that this fic is rated R.

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The sun was just beginning to rise over the river as I eased my jeep onto the freeway. I was tired but I felt great. I'd raised eight zombies tonight, and I had that kind of fading endorphin rush you get after a good run. It was times like this that I loved my job.

Of course, the lack of sleep was making me loopy. Added to that, I was still a little bit thrown from a phone call I'd gotten between zombie number three, Carl Solomon for a will review, and zombie number four, Melissa Dupont for some psychiatric junk.

Damian had a girlfriend.

Not only that, he'd wanted permission to stay over for the day with her at the Circus. That was fine, but him asking had creeped me out. The only saving grace was that he seemed as uncomfortable about asking as I was to be asked. Hopefully, we wouldn't have a repeat.

The lady in question was Elinor, one of the British vamps that came over about a year ago. She was all tiny and dainty and quiet, not at all like me. That was good, right?

I shook my head as I changed lanes and sped up, while glancing in the rearview mirror to make sure my shadow was still behind me. Sure enough, the little grey car had changed lanes as well.

The familiar annoyance clenched in my stomach. It had been almost two months since Edward called to warn me about Olaf, and so far, no one had seen hide nor hair of the psychopath. I still had around-the-clock wererat bodyguards, not that they'd had to do anything resembling guarding my body.

So often in the last couple of weeks, when Olaf didn't make a move, when Edward hadn't called, I'd thought about sending the bodyguards back to Rafael. Nothing was going to happen. It had only been a faintly disturbing call from Edward that set this off in the first place.

And yet... every time I picked up the phone to call Rafael, something stopped me from dialing the number. I wasn't psychic, never had any real flashes of insight, but there was a tiny prickling at the back of my head when I thought about Olaf. Call it woman's intuition or plain old paranoia; whatever it was, it meant I bit my tongue and accepted the bodyguards in uneasy silence.

I shook my head. I was almost home. Micah went to work a couple of hours ago and wouldn't be home until noon, which meant Nathaniel and I had the house all to ourselves. He was probably already asleep. I'd get the hell out of this skirt outfit to take a quick shower, climb into bed next to Nathaniel and get some well-earned cuddles.

I pulled into my driveway and parked my jeep. Undoing my seatbelt required more effort that usual; the sleepiness, I supposed. I grabbed my bag off the passenger seat and managed to spill a mound of papers to the floor of the car.

"Fuck," I muttered. Piles of paperwork from the office now blanketed the bottom of my jeep, and on top lay that letter from Harry I'd been carrying around for the little while. Ignoring the paperwork, I leaned over to pick up Harry's letter, glancing at it again.

Hi Anita. Thanks for your letters, it was good to hear from you all.

Things are okay as can be expected here. That teacher I told you was no good? Snape? He's teaching Defence Against the Dark Arts this year instead of potions. We had class on the day that I got your letters. I got in trouble but the headmaster said it was okay, and he wasn't going to expel me.

I don't know what I'm going to do at Christmas. I usually go to the Weasleys' house, but I don't know what's going to happen this year. If I can go back to St. Louis, I'll do that. I miss you guys.

I'm going to mail this from Hogsmeade, the village near my school. We don't get to leave school grounds except on special occasions. I think you'd like the place. I know Jason would. It's not big like St. Louis, but there's a lot of forest around.

Tell Damian I said hi. I told my friends that he's my grandfather. Ron had a problem, but I told him I don't care and that he was being an idiot. He says he's fine now, with me having a vampire relative. I mean, it's not like I slag on his family. Except Percy, who's a Ministry toady, but that doesn't count.

Oh! I'm the house Quidditch captain. I know you probably won't care, but it's really neat. Our team will be really good this year, lots of new blood.

I keep talking to Reece, he's the little guy we saw at the train station. He's from Wales, and he's muggleborn, and he's been like that since he was little. He likes it here. That's good; I was worried that he'd be like Remus, that friend I told you about. But I've been thinking. Remus didn't have a supportive pack and Reece does. He (Reece) said his mum's really nice, a teacher or something, and his dad's a mechanic.

I'm bad at letters, too, so I'll stop now. I'll be careful. I promise.

Harry.


I folded the letter up, smiling again. The letter felt like Harry had left something out, but I figured it was probably a girlfriend or something. I made a note to ask Nathaniel or Jason about that.

I put the letter back in my bag and got out of my jeep. Tony, last night's bodyguard, was standing in the door of his car. "Claudia should be here in a minute," he said in his oddly nasal voice. "Do you want me to come in?"

I hesitated before I answered. Claudia was coming in from farther out, she was probably stuck in traffic. "No, go on," I said, shutting my door. "I'll see you tomorrow night."

He nodded and slid back into his seat, driving away before I even locked the jeep's door.

I stood, my hand on the key still in the door. Tony wasn't usually so impatient to leave. He said very little, but then most of the bodyguards did that.

Nothing was wrong, I told myself. Just because a guy wanted to take off work early was not a big deal. He was probably tired.

But he was a bodyguard. Wererat bodyguards didn't leave early.

He was one of Rafael's men, I contradicted myself. Rafael was nothing if not professional, and expected all his rats to be the same. Breathing deep, I decided to call Rafael when I woke up and mention Tony skipping out. It was probably nothing.

I put my bag, with my zombie kit and my lunch bag, on the hood of the jeep to get my hands free, and looked around. Everything looked normal. Nathaniel's car was in the driveway like it should be, the lawn neat. There was nothing that should be sending these chilly shivers up my spine.

Nothing that made me put my keys in my pocket and pull my Browning out of its holster as I walked toward the front door.

My foot was on the first step when I saw the white box, brilliant in the sunlight, on the welcome mat. It was one of those gift boxes, with a lid on top, hiding the contents from view. My heart was pounding as I stared at that box.

No one should be leaving me presents on the front step, not with Nathaniel home. It could be a bomb or something equally horrible. I should get the hell out of there and call the police, just leave--

The wind shifted, and there was a wisp of movement around the box. Tiny strands blew in the breeze, caught between the box and the lid.

Tiny auburn strands, against the stark whiteness of the box.

A small sound escaped my throat as I stumbled up those steps, dropping all my mental shields and reaching out for Nathaniel. My mind touched the deadness of Jean-Claude and Damian, only minutes after sunrise. Richard's confused thoughts brushed mine; he was awake, but he wasn't the one I wanted.

I couldn't feel Nathaniel.

Logic deserted me as panic rose, screaming and clawing at me. I pulled the lid off the box in one jerky movement and let it fall to the porch from my suddenly nerveless fingers.

The box was full of auburn hair, Nathaniel's hair, long and loose and spilling over the sides in the sunlight. The world was going grey around the edges as I fought to keep breathing. The air I sucked in smelled like fur and vanilla and Nathaniel, and under it all the metallic scent of blood.

Not caring any more, I plunged my hand into that box and tried to pull the hair to the side. My fingers hit something solid under all that hair, and the world stopped.

I closed my hand around all that hair and pulled it out of the box. The sun shone bright and uncaring on me as I looked down into the bottom of that blood-soaked box, at Nathaniel's severed hand .

No sound came out of my mouth, but I screamed loud and long in my head, terror rising up until it threatened to choke me. Across the city, I felt Jean-Claude and Damian wake, Richard's panic, but it didn't matter. My hand was pushing the door open in a second, my whole world narrowing down to one thought: I had to find Nathaniel.

MA PETITE, NO-- Jean-Claude's scream in my mind cut off abruptly as I stumbled across the threshold. I tried to raise my gun, but all my strength was falling away, falling like I was falling to the ground, my body going limp as I toppled onto the white carpet.

I had to get to Nathaniel. I managed to roll onto my back, screaming at my body to work. I had to find Nathaniel. But I couldn't move, nothing was working and I didn't know why. The sun was shining through the windows onto the white walls, bouncing through the open front door onto the mirror and painting a bright spot on the stairs, and I could only lay there.

Footsteps, soft in the carpet, started toward me. I couldn't see who it was, what they were doing. The footsteps stopped, and there came the tiny click of the latch as the front door swung shut.

Someone knelt beside me; I could hear the breathing, but I couldn't turn my head to see. I had faced vampires and zombies and witches, but nothing in my life had terrified me as that anonymous breathing.

My gun was pulled away from my limp fingers. Large, blood-covered hands came into my line of sight, lowered to the sides of my head, sinking into my hair and gently moving my head around.

Olaf.

I tried to cry out, but still I couldn't move. Olaf slowly let go of my head, a strand of my hair sticking to the thick red blood on his hand as he moved back. He looked just like I remembered from the last time I'd seen him; tall and muscular and bald, a strange sort of expression in his eyes.

Just like last time, he was covered in blood.

I tried to scream out for Jean-Claude or Richard, Damian or Nathaniel or anybody, but everything was silent.

Olaf brushed his fingers over my temple. His touch made me want to throw up, but my body wouldn't even respond enough for that.

"Anita," he said, his voice obscenely tender. "I've been waiting for you. For this." His fingers moved lower, down my face and throat, toward my shirt. "So very long."

He slid his arms under my body, lifted me carefully. I tried to fight, to kick or shift around to unbalance him, to no avail.

My head fell back over his arm, and I watched the hall wall give way to the living room. Flecks and splashes of bright red blood coated the cheerful yellow paint, the front of the television, the bookshelf. Olaf knelt to lay me down, my skirt bunching up my legs. As he pulled his arms out from under me, my head rolled to the side, and I finally caught sight of Nathaniel.

What was left of Nathaniel.

Then the ruined body moved slightly, a tiny twitch, but it told me something that couldn't possibly be true, not with that much damage.

Nathaniel was still alive.

This wasn't real, this could be real. Olaf wasn't here, Nathaniel wasn't like that, I wasn't here. It wasn't real.

I couldn't look away from Nathaniel as I felt Olaf's fingers on my wrists, bringing my arms up over my head. Then a hand balled in my hair and jerked my head around. "You're going to be looking at me," he said. There was a spark of something in his face now, but it didn't matter. I was going to kill him for what he'd done to Nathaniel, even if I couldn't move a muscle.

Olaf held something up, which I recognized as a voodoo fetish, a human hand bone with a single strand of dark hair tied to it by a red cord knotted around the bone several times . "This is why you cannot move," he said in a low tone. He fingered it, then untied the bottom knot.

Immediately, breathing was easier, and the stench of blood got thicker. I concentrated around my fear and panic, and felt my fingers begin to respond. Olaf stood up and moved out of sight. "I can't let you get away, Anita" he said. "Not yet."

I moved my hand one inch to the side before he was back, straddling my chest. His hands were full of something, but it wasn't until I saw the first flash of the silver spike that I got feeling back in my legs and tried to press my foot into the carpet. He reached up over my head, and drove the first spike into my palm.

I screamed.

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Exhausted, Harry stood in front of McGonagall's desk, holding out a parchment. "Here."

McGonagall looked at the proffered roll. "What is this, Mr. Potter?"

"My essay," Harry said, waking up a little. "The one that was due on Monday morning? Like, now?"

"I am aware of what it is, Mr. Potter. I was under the impression that you were coming to ask for an extension, in light of Saturday's event."

Harry blinked. Oh, right, the werewolf and full moon thing. "You never said anything, I thought I had to have it done," Harry said thickly. "I stayed up all night."

McGonagall plucked the parchment from Harry's hand and began to skim the essay.

"So, uh, can I have an extension?" Harry asked, plastering what he hoped was a winning smile on his face.

"There is no need," McGonagall said, rolling up the parchment and placing it in a pile on her desk. "It's perfectly acceptable."

"Okay," Harry said, although he wasn't sure he agreed. He'd spent all night on the essay, finishing ten minutes before the homework was due. Like most of his essays, the content was less governed by quality than the time limit. "Bye then."

Harry wandered out of the room, nearly being run over by McGonagall's next class. Sleep, Harry thought wistfully. I'm too tired even to eat. I'll go to sleep. Nice sleep. Should tell Neville to wake me before Astronomy at midnight.

Ron was in the dorm frowning down at a book when Harry stumbled over to his bed. "Hey, you hand in your essay?" Ron said.

"Yeah," Harry muttered, pulling off his robes and dropping it in a heap on the floor. "I'm going to sleep."

"Don't let me bother you."

Harry grunted something as he dropped his glasses on the bedside table and collapsed, fully clothed, on top of his bed. He was sleep before his head even hit the pillow.

And he dreamed.

He was in Anita's house, standing in the front entranceway. Sun was shining off every surface, the air muffled. Harry tried to call out, but the air was like thick cotton, and the noise was swallowed up.

His eyes drifted over the hall. Everything was white and shiny, everything except Anita's black gun lying on the carpet.

Sounds fought their way out of the living room, muffled and confused. Harry tried to walk into the room, but it was like moving through a wall of sand, hard and slow. The more he struggled, the less progress he made.

Somehow, he got to the living room door. If he could have screamed, he would have, at what he saw. A tall man, almost a giant, was picking up something from a box by the wall, his back to Harry. Harry's gaze fell to Anita, flopping weakly on the floor. His eyes couldn't understand what was beside Anita, something bleeding and meaty and not quite in the shape of a man.

Harry fell slowly to his knees, reaching for Anita, but he was held in place on the rug. He couldn't reach her.

In slow motion, the man across the room stood up.

Anita twisted and turned, her hands held above her head by large silver nails. Her eyes met Harry's, and she froze.

She saw him.

Harry reached harder, trying to push his hand that extra inch to reach Anita, just as the man across the room turned around. It was like trying to reach through a stone wall, impenetrable.

NO! Harry screamed. He strained to reach Anita, and she raised her hand, sliding up the nail embedded in her palm. Almost, almost...

The man knelt by Anita's side.

Harry's hand touched Anita's, and he gripped her palm so tightly the sharp edge of the nail bit deep into his flesh. All his rage and fear exploded as he held onto Anita for dear life, ignoring the screaming pain. Anita's cold power erupted like ice in Harry's chest, as cold as death in his body. "Impedimenta!" Harry screamed.

The man froze, knife poised midair.

The door behind Harry flew apart in an explosion of sound. Another large blast and the man's head exploded in a shower of brains and blood.

Another blast, and the falling body jerked as a hole appeared in the chest. Someone with black boots walked around the body, firing the gun again and again into the man's body.

Harry looked up from Anita to the newcomer. The man's pale blue eyes stared back at Harry. Even though Harry had never seen this man before, he knew who it was, just as Anita knew.

Edward.

"Anita?" Edward said. He moved toward Anita, one hand outstretched, as the world began to swim in screaming colors and sounds, and Harry opened his eyes to see Ron leaning over him.

"Harry?" Ron said worriedly. "You were screaming."

Harry rolled and leaned over the side of his bed as all his panic and terror came up and he threw up all over the floor. Shaking, he wiped his mouth with his hand. Something red dripped to the floor, and he shakily turned his hand over.

The flesh of his palm had been sliced open, with a mark on it just like a large silver nail.

...to be continued

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Date: 2006-03-31 06:40 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] alydhe.livejournal.com
*First Comment Dance* Yay! I'm first!

*ahem* You evil, vile, sadistic, cruel, tease! How can you just leave it there? Poor Anita! Poor Nathaniel! Poor Harry! You're not gonna just leave Nathaniel like that are you? He'll heal, right? Will Harry find a way to get to St. Louis pronto? Oh please say yes. *sigh* The wait for the next chapter is going to kill me.

May I just say, though, that this chapter was amazing. My heart was pounding all the way through and if I'd been sitting on a chair I'd have been at the edge of it. You could've cut the suspense with Olaf's Freaky Serial Killer Blade-o-Doom.

Oh, and I will worship you forever for bringing Edward in.

Date: 2006-03-31 07:09 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com
You evil, vile, sadistic, cruel, tease!

Yeah.

Harry will find a way to deal with this. Something will happen. Questions will be answered. Um, hope is on the horizon?

The next chapter will be up tomorrow evening.

And there was no way Edward wasn't getting involved at this point.

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Date: 2006-03-31 06:54 am (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
fucking hell....

the only questions I can seem to draw up in my mind at the moment is if Nathaniel's ok and what the fuck kind of link does Harry have to Anita?

I want to kill the mother fucker for doing that to Nathaniel.

Re: .....

Date: 2006-03-31 07:18 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com
he's out of the picture. next chapter with those answers, or at least some of them, tomorrow.

Date: 2006-03-31 06:54 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] beachmouse.livejournal.com
You do realize that by ending on that cliffhanger, you've set it up so no one's going to want to kill you right now. Or at least they're going to hold off on the mayhem until certain plot points are resolved.

After the last couple of chapters, this one seemed a little bit short, but it definitely made up for it in intensity.

Date: 2006-03-31 07:17 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com
The plan I have is to maintain the action until the last chapter, at which point the story will be over and everyone will be too caught up in it to kill me.

That's the plan.

This chapter was about 3,500 words, but it was the place to stop. If that makes sense.

....

Date: 2006-03-31 07:06 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lishel_fracrium.livejournal.com
Oh God...I have never felt so emotionaly wrentched after reading a fic, so sick so into it. It was horrifying...God that's horrible. I really feel like I have to throw up. I have read so many grusome things,torture,some rape and of course the LKH series but damn...I have nver been so into it,so frieghtened and just sickened..it was like for a brief moment I could see and hear it all. it was soo real. and even though I feel seriuslt sick to my stomach my point is you have talent....don't ever let anyone tell you differently. I really do think I'm gonna be sick and cry now.

eek

Date: 2006-03-31 07:15 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com
*wince* I'm sorry?

I tried to be as sparse on the details as possible, when it came to Nathaniel. Maybe that's why makes it so horrble. I'm going to stop disecting the action now. Next chapter up tomorrow.

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Date: 2006-03-31 07:10 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] laney-1974.livejournal.com
Wow. This chapter really caught me by surprise. It was so sudden. I think I'm going to have to read it a second time for it all to sink in.

Date: 2006-03-31 07:16 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com
The suddenness was the important part. I wanted to go from Harry Harry Harry to OMG St. Louis for the impact.

Judging from the commments I'm getting, I think I suceeded.

Um, yeah, tell me after you've read it again what you think. *goes off to mutter in a corner*

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Date: 2006-03-31 07:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] elle-blessing.livejournal.com
OMG NATHANIEL!!!! Ok, I can calm down now. I do know that Shifters can heal from amazing damage...and with Harry and Anita he could be ok...and the hand thing...Cherry grew back a leg...they can grow back body parts...???!!!!!!!!!! Nathaniel is my favorite...don't take him away!!!!!! I guess I'm not as calm as I thought.

Harry and Anita finally connected in those dreams...I smell a plot device ;) And not only did they connect, but it was powerful. wow. I'm on the edge of my seat for what happens next.

OMG!!!!!!!!!!!

Date: 2006-03-31 07:27 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com
Yes, shifters can heal a large amount of damage, esp. when they are more powerful (such as Nate is now that he is in that triumverate)

That's a plot device. More on that in the coming chapters.

Yeah :/

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Date: 2006-03-31 07:22 am (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
OH man. WOW!! That was amazing and . . . wow. I just don't have the words. I think I'll be checking as often as possible tomorrow to find the next update. Again, that was just grand.

Date: 2006-03-31 07:28 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com
The update will be tomorrow evening, if that helps any.

Date: 2006-03-31 07:23 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lunamazes.livejournal.com
OMG, you can't cut Nathaniel's hair!!!... sorry, let me say that again: you can't cut Nathaniel's hand!! and his hair!!

poor boys and poor anita.

Date: 2006-03-31 07:49 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com
poor boys and poor anita
I agree, whole-heartedly.

Date: 2006-03-31 08:01 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] todaygirl.livejournal.com
Please don't kill Nathaniel. I hope Edward made it in time to save the leopard to.

So Harry and Anita is connected in some way? Interesting. How did they get connected?
Wonder what Harry is going to do now, hopefully there is a St Louis tripp in the future for the wizard.

I hope Olaf's death was really painful. Can't wait for more;)

Date: 2006-03-31 08:36 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mary-re.livejournal.com
HOMG. HOMG.
*flails*
HOMG, so crazy. Nathaniel, nooooooooo!!!!!!! *wibbles*

And omg, the dream-thing, and he interfered, and Edward eeeeee!

You've made me incoherent. Um.

Date: 2006-04-01 07:22 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com
Ooh, I made you flail. My work here is done.

Wow!

Date: 2006-03-31 08:46 am (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
OMFG Mhalachai! I could feel the horror running down my spine as I read Anita seeing Nathaniels hair in the box. That sick, sick bastard, good thing Ed and Harry showed up to save the day...a lil' to late for Nathaniel though. I'm assuming we are seeing the connection of Harry's vampire and werewolf blood react with Anita's marks and leopard? Have i told you lately how much i love you for updating so often? haha, have a good weekend, and good luck and enjoyment in your writings.
~Stephanie

Re: Wow!

Date: 2006-04-02 02:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com
The connection between Harry and Anita is a bit more complicated than that. There are three real threads to it all, one of which won't come out until the very end of the story, however. All in good time :)

Date: 2006-03-31 09:36 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deepfishy.livejournal.com
Let me start by saying this is an awesome, awesome chapter, pulling together several dangling plot threads (Olaf, Edward, Harry's connection to Anita) in a powerful way. It is awe-some. I am in awe.

I love how it starts off so innocuously - Damian has a girlfriend?!? - and then...what's up with Tony? Is he betraying Anita, or was there magic involved?

And then, the Box. When she's digging through the box, that was such a gut-clenching, heart-in-my-mouth moment. When she touched something solid beneath all the hair...well, I'm sure you can guess what I thought she was going to find. *is traumatised*

Olaf is so darn creepy. The horror of that entire scene was heightened by the minimalism of the writing. Little images, more powerful as they accumulate - blood across yellow paint, Nathaniel, the voodoo fetish, the silver nails...

And then, pay-off with Harry's dream-connections with Anita. And Edward, oh Edward! You know I've been waiting for his return :D.

Finishing the chapter was like the end of an adrenaline rush - I feel a little drained, a little giddy, but *good*. Satisfied. Inevitable is an amazing crossover, and this chapter proves it. Can't wait to see where you go after that semi-cliffie!


Now I have to go and hug Nathaniel for a while. Nathaniel with hair and skin, kthx. *sob*

Date: 2006-04-02 02:25 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com
Let me start by saying this is an awesome, awesome chapter, pulling together several dangling plot threads (Olaf, Edward, Harry's connection to Anita) in a powerful way.

That was one of the challenges, setting up the pins to be knocked down at once. Particularly the dreams -- everyone thought it was some cute thing until BOOM Harry saved everyone.

the Box

Yeah, that was pretty traumatizing. I've been having nightmares about that myself.

The horror of that entire scene was heightened by the minimalism of the writing

I was going to try and write it up more, but realized that Anita was probably going to be in overload, with shock and worry and, once she saw Nathaniel, utter terror, so I left it brief, with what she saw.

*cuddles Nathaniel* I'm a bad, bad person.

Date: 2006-03-31 10:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] booster17.livejournal.com
It's... but... you just.... Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!

This is gonna be a long wait till the next part.

I know everyone else has said it, but....

Date: 2006-03-31 11:46 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] morgie.livejournal.com
.... wow.

Is Damien's girl as innocent as she might be!

Did the rat bodyguard betray Anita!

Did Dumbledore feel that surge of magic that must have flared!

Will Harry make it back to St Louis to help out the others!

Or will he have to stay in Hogwarts!

How /does/ Edward always show up in time!

All this, and more, next chapter? (makes with the pleady puppy-eyes. Er. But not real ones - that would make Reece said).

I shouldn't write reviews when I'm still asleep, but just in case it was missed in the silliness....

Wow!

Re: I know everyone else has said it, but....

Date: 2006-03-31 04:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] zed42.livejournal.com
Is Damien's girl as innocent as she might be!
probably not... but she probably *does* know about harry... that should be interesting... maybe she's christoff's spy on harry's grandfather!

Did the rat bodyguard betray Anita!
interesting point... maybe him wanting to take off had something to do with whatever olaf did to trap anita?

How /does/ Edward always show up in time!
he was probably tailing anita... didn't he say that he'd be around?

Date: 2006-03-31 12:29 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sabriel-0405.livejournal.com
I have to concur with everyone else. You are really evil. This was amazing. And cruel. You certainly know the meaning of the word cliffhanger!

Date: 2006-04-02 02:26 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com
Yeah, I'm a bad person. I just figured that it was time to jumpstart everyone's attention.

(Plus it was the best/worst place for a cliffhanger ever)

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From: [identity profile] sabriel-0405.livejournal.com - Date: 2006-04-02 04:16 am (UTC) - Expand

terrific!

Date: 2006-03-31 12:55 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
I red the chapter at 8 30 and i still reading it... AAargh!!!!!!!!!!!
Poor Nat!
What the hell Olaf do to the house? Why Anita can't fell Nate or the other?
Harry is now a necromancer? He used Anita power doesn't he?
Did Edward come to hogwarts? ( i really really would like to see Edward Vs Snape)
O my god Nat...
I'm in a little shock, if you dont' understand.
You are a great writer!
Ver

wow

Date: 2006-03-31 12:58 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
i have started reading your fic ahile ago but never before i wanted to write a comment. this part was unbelievable. i was going just to check if there were some updates and study then, but i after reading this part all i could think about was if nathaniel will be ok. will hary be ok. oh my god, ca't wait for tommorow. it's been several hours but still...wow. ok, sorry for spelling mistakes:)

Date: 2006-03-31 01:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shopteacher-guy.livejournal.com
OMG
OMG!

Did the Voodoo Fetish drive the WereRat away?
How could Harry get all the way to St. Louis in body.. but Ron didn't see him dissapear..
Nathanial is going to be ok.. right???
OMG...

Date: 2006-03-31 01:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] denitta.livejournal.com
Dood,

Just wow.

I'm sitting here at work reading this and I'm freaking out and thinking that this is no way to start the day, but I don't care. Still so worth it. I'm drinking coffee now just to calm me down. I can't wait for tomorrow night.

And maybe then, I'll be coherent enough to actually comment on the content of the chapter.

Date: 2006-04-02 02:29 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com
Freaked you out that bad, huh? Sorry (kinda).

Coherence is best reserved for political speeches and doctors visits. Not fic reviews :D

Date: 2006-03-31 02:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shopteacher-guy.livejournal.com
Ok, just did read two, didn't have class first period..
This chapter took my breath away.. even on the second read. With such a deep plot and characters you don't need to go into huge detail about every aspect of the St. Louis scene. There are some very detailed bits.. hair in the box.. then it moves dream like (or in this case nightmare)..

correct me if I'm wrong.
I think the Fetish was responsible for both Damion AND the Wererat guard not being home. Damion's reason is just such a coincidence, and we all know what Anita thinks about those, for my mind.

On second read I think Edward saw Harry,, but Harry was there in spirit, but his palm. but Ron heard Harry scream and didn't say anything about him not being there...
wow, great chapter.. Oh, will be back writing this weekend, as the real world may give me a break and allow some time to be creative.

Date: 2006-03-31 02:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kyani-no-kokoro.livejournal.com
Amazing. The sheer amount of adrenaline packed into this chapter has replaced the need for my daily dose of caffeine. This chapter is creepy, horrifying, and over all, exactly what a scene with Olaf should be. I think Olaf actually creeps me out more when you write him than when LKH does. Edward's entrance is absolutely perfect, too. He's one of my favorite characters, and you certainly do him justice. And what about Harry? What sort of connection does he have with Anita, and why? It is something to do with Damian being his grandfather?

Date: 2006-04-02 02:32 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com
The idea of a serial rapist/killer obsessing on Anita is probably one of the most terrifying things that's happened in the series -- there's no logic involved, and somehow when rape is involved the violence just seems that much more real, at least to me.

The Harry/Anita connection will be explained more later, but the Damian thing is one aspect, yes.

Date: 2006-03-31 02:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] goddessvicky.livejournal.com
::growl::

It was.... soo........

Perfect.

I hate how much it was.

I'm SO looking forward to tonight when the new part will be out. I wish things like this could get published so I could reread it all once it's finished in book form.

I think after I finish the Anita books to Dan (I'm reading them to him) I'm going to read this to him. ::evil grin::

Date: 2006-04-02 02:37 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com
perfectly creepy? Perfectly wrong? Yeah, I agree ;)

You can print it off yourself :) That's what I plan to do when I'm done. Sadly, it'll be like a zillion pages... but then you can print it in bulk.

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From: [identity profile] goddessvicky.livejournal.com - Date: 2006-04-02 05:33 pm (UTC) - Expand

Date: 2006-03-31 02:40 pm (UTC)
ext_60814: (Inevitable OT3 L/H/G)
From: [identity profile] thekams.livejournal.com
Oh my goodness...

Oh poor Nathaniel!!! Why does he always end up getting the short end of the stick?? And Anita with those nails in her hands...frigg, Olaf is SUCH a homicidal psychopath (and an asshole).

Ok, so the Harry thing. Verrry innnteresting...He must have some kind of odd bond with Anita if he was able to actually interfere through his dreams. I'm sort of glad he didn't realize that what he was seeing was Nathaniel...I think he would have been just a tough more angry. Edward...oh Edward. He always shows up at just the right moment, which leads me to believe that he was watching Anita's house (or Olaf himself) and coulnd't get through to Anita until Harry worked his mojo on Olaf.

Class beckons me, but I am all anxious for the next chapter now! I really hope he finds a way to check up on St. Louis...maybe Dumbledore will let him go for a weekend!? Maybe!? *hopeful*

Date: 2006-04-02 02:47 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com
Oh poor Nathaniel!!! Why does he always end up getting the short end of the stick?

Because doing bad things to Nathaniel is like kicking a puppy: Everyone's suddenly freaked out and hating the author waiting for the resolve.

The Harry/Anita bond will be resolved one day, I promise. If I end the story without addressing it, you are all allowed to scream profanities at me.

Wowsers

Date: 2006-03-31 03:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vampiress04.livejournal.com
Hi Mhalachai!

Just got back from a week in Iceland and what was the first thing I did? It wasn't sleep after forty hours of no sleep, I'll tell you that! It was to check if you had updated, and you had! So, I read the three new chapters and they were all amazing! Oh, but they really were the best.

The action was so believable on the full moon, and I have so many theories, oh so many. Like, the reason that Snape didn't tell Dumbledore? Because it wasn't really Snape, but someone else Polyjuicing him/herself into Snape ( I seem to have many of these feelings... ) and therefore it was him/her who did that to poor little Reece, who by the way, is still too cute for words.

The lesson with Snape was also great, you seem to have a real knack for writing the characters and make them so in character, it's really amazing.

Harry and Remus really have to meet soon!

Ok, now onto this chapter. First of all, so freaky....but in a good way. In the way that makes you want more! Lots of Love and worship for bringing in Edward when you did, he was really needed. I love Edward by the way, me fave Anita man.

Yay, is Olaf dead?

Poor poor Nathaniel, he'll be ok, right? You can't kill him when there's potential Harry/Nath in the future! And poor Anita, I hope she's ok, too. And yay for Harry doing whatever the hell it is that he did...again! So looking forward to the next chapter! Loving you,

Vampiress.

Re: Wowsers

Date: 2006-04-02 05:17 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com
The action was so believable on the full moon, and I have so many theories, oh so many. Like, the reason that Snape didn't tell Dumbledore? Because it wasn't really Snape, but someone else Polyjuicing him/herself into Snape.

Nope, this was Snape. A Snape whose motives are difficult to determine, as are his loyalties. *ahem*

Reece, who by the way, is still too cute for words.
He's just a little social puppy. *rubs his head*

Ok, now onto this chapter. First of all, so freaky....but in a good way.

I know. Try having it in my head for a very long time until I got to this chapter :/

Yay, is Olaf dead?
Dead dead dead.

Poor poor Nathaniel, he'll be ok, right? You can't kill him when there's potential Harry/Nath in the future! And poor Anita, I hope she's ok, too.

Yup, Nathaniel will be okay... one day. I know I must tease you all with the Harry/Nathaniel smootchies. *smootchies*

And yeah, Anita will be okay too :)

Date: 2006-03-31 03:18 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] ansku
Wow. Intense. I really really hope that Nathaniel will be alright with time, shifting can cure lots of things and there's always Raina, right? Great chapter, I'm glad Olaf is finally gone...

Date: 2006-04-02 05:23 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com
Nathaniel will be alright with time, shifting can cure lots of things and there's always Raina, right?

Yes, physically Nathaniel is fine. Anita's hand will need a while to heal, but her marks with Nathaniel and Damian, as well as the marks with Richard and Jean-Claude, will fix that right up.

However, the emotional trauma will not be so easily solved :/
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