Inevitable update

[mhalachai]

So Inevitable Nine is up. It's setting up the danger and stuff. A very necessary chapter.

Next time: Jason! The Circus! A to-be-named vampire!

Comments

[sabriel-0405.livejournal.com]

This was amazingly good. I thought the police procedural piece felt very real (not that I would actually know) and the HP/St. Louis cross seemed even more possible/probable. I like how you woven Harry's world into Anita's. The Salem school was a very nice touch. (I'm from Boston.) Really nice work!

[mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com]

It was the hardest chapter to get thorough, I must say. All that police stuff I felt needed to be in there, to get anywhere the realism I see in the AB books. But there are a few definite plot points laid out in this chapter we'll be getting to in a few chapters.

The Salem school is apparently mentioned in Goblet of Fire. I relied on the HP Lexicon a lot for this chapter, because looking up the spelling of "evanesco" was low in my books.

Thanks for your kind words!

[mary-re.livejournal.com]

EeeeeeeSoMuchLove! I was wondering why Harry was so very reluctant to tell them about Avada Kedavra, and you had to be evil and draw it out to almost the very end of the chapter, lol.
And the photo thing, and how very shocked Anita was with the things that Harry found utterly normal, and Tammy's jealousy, and much more...yay for you!

I'm sorry for the incoherency, but I was just so happy that you updated! I really liked this chapter, and can't wait for the next one.

[mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com]

*grin* thanks! All I can say is that I tried to write the characters as I see them.

I'm not sure where I'm pulling Tammy from, tho. She was orignally there only to get Harry on the scene, now she's got this role in the story and Harry thought she was a squib and she can be his excuse to help the cops, etc. She used to be this eager beaver cop in the books, but I'm expecting that motherhood and marriage will mellow her.

Anyway, I ramble :)

[cissasghost.livejournal.com]

hee hee .. oh, what you said about Tammy sounds *so* familiar. Would you believe that Draco and Ginny were originally inserted into AYG just so the Willow/Snape wouldn't get monotonous? It's so fun when a story just takes on a life of its own like that - unnerving, but fun. You Tammy is very interesting - that little bit of bitterness was intriguing.

And I very much enjoyed the chapter. You've got everyone's "voice" down perfectly, especially Anita. I think I actually like your Anita and your Harry better than the canon versions, and I KNOW I like your Micah better (though he wasn't in this chapter, just thought I'd mention it). You have nothing to worry about as far as realism with the police investigation, it's completely believable. I'm looking forward to the next chapter, with the to-be-named vampire.

-Sonya

[mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com]

I've found that writing in character is easier for those characters from books, compared with shows. I'm always terrified that my Buffy characters are going to be seen as totally OOC. (you know, because I'm nuts). I'm glad that people are liking Micah, he gets an important confrontation role in a few chapters. Trying to include all the core characters from the AB world is hard, mostly because there's 87 of them.