Interesting Inevitable comments

[mhalachai]

I've been getting some interesting Inevitable comments recently. I thought I'd share because, well, I've been so busy with RL (hence no ficcing) that I miss you guys.

1. Anita and Harry are too angsty.
They're not too bad. Right? At least it's productive angst, and they're not wallowing. I'd like to hear everyone's comments on the level of angst in Inevitable as it compared with the angst in the Anita Blake books and the Harry Potter books. Good, bad, ugly?

2. The point of view swap is confusing
I thought about this long and hard before I began to write. I think it's easier to understand, as Harry is 3rd person limited POV, while Anita is 1st person POV, than having them both be third person. There are sections when there is better effect for the person with the POV to see something that the other person is doing, without knowing their motives.

3. Harry is being too childish
I did this deliberately. Not write him as childish, but write him as a teenager. It happens more when it's Anita telling the story, because she tends to tinge everything with her own brand of special, but I didn't want to fall into the "Harry is an adult in a teenager's body" trap. That's not the story I want to tell. He's in a new world, without anything to fall back on, and yet crap keeps happening because of him. It's going to take him a while to find himself a place.

I've also been getting wonderful comments that really do cheer my day. Thanks everyone :)

(However, if you do have a comment about Inevitable, good or bad, feel free to make it. I'm always up for talking about my longest story EVAR).

Comments

[eavling.livejournal.com]

1. Even though the angst was perfect for the story, I feel a bit scared to re-read those chapters where Anita went crazy after Bellatrix's cruciatus. I feel this way, because you wrote it all too well, and I'd be bawling after every chapter again. I don't think you should change a thing. Now that that episode is over, the level of introspection and 'angst' is exactly right.

2. You're brilliant!

3. He's perfect!

[mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com]

Thanks. Your post from inspired me to go back and read IN from that point.... and yowza, so many spelling mistakes! Not even funny.

Oh well. This is why we have editors, right? *ahem*