Inevitable 14

[mhalachai]

Inevitable 14: That is not dashed with pain and weariness and fault; I crave the stain is up, posted and ready for your eager eyes.
At TTH
At Pomme de Sang
At Skyehawke

Please, I crave your feedback let me know what you think.

I'm starting to understand why we never see a lot of the supporting characters in LKH's fics. I've got... *counts* 16 characters on screen at one point in this monstrosity. It's unpleasant. You end up having people stay silent a lot, which seldom happens in real life. Gah.

Other thoughts... I'm not sure what to do with Micah. I've got this thing that I'll probably never explore in fic, that of all the people in Anita's life, Richard is the one that will make Micah jealous. Everyone else... Nathaniel's a sub, Damian's Anita's property, JC's the Master, and Asher belong to JC. Micah can deal with them all, but Richard's a new category. He's an alpha male, who has demonstrated himself hard-put to share Anita's affections. It is in this mindset that I write In.14.

Those who are wondering about Anita's mental state.... all I can say it, keep wondering.

Comments

[wolfseer.livejournal.com]

Aw, great chapter. It is difficult to have a lot of people in one room in a fanfic, but you pulled it off rather well. I really liked the Damian/Harry bonding at the end. And adding "absolute pants" was hilarious and very apropos for Harry's personality. He reminds me of a cousin of mine, highly embarrassed to be caught saying any of the 'harder' swears in the presence of adults. In fact, the tips of his ears still turn red if he even says pants in front of our grandmum. LOL!

Anyway, looking forward to the next installment. :)