FIC: Inevitable 19

[mhalachai]

New Inevitable chapter! Nineteen: Alone In The Storm

At TTH
(and if TTH is broken:)
At Pomme de Sang
At Skyehawke

As always, any comments and questions are welcome. The next chapter should be along any day.

Comments

[sabriel-0405.livejournal.com]

This chapter was unbelievably good. I loved how well you blended wizardry with the Anitaverse, how seamless that appears. I didn't expect another chapter so soon. Thank you!

[mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com]

No, thank you :) Making Tammy my link to the WW was something I hadn't planned on at first, but you know how these things go.

And was it soon? It looks like a couple of weeks between chapters. Oh well. This chapter was only half the length of the last one (only, she says), didn't take nearly as long to churn out :)

[sabriel-0405.livejournal.com]

So soon after you told us you were way too busy with real life to write!

[mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com]

You get used to any schedule, I guess. I had a bit of time today to write, and got the second bit of the chapter done. This chapter was a bit hard to get into, because my mind's trying to figure out the big reveal three chapters or so from now, but it got done.

[emeraldswan.livejournal.com]

Two of my favorite stories updated in one weekend. I think I kinda love you. :)

Just finished the chapter. Most excellent. I really like the direction this story seems to be going, and your characterization continues to amaze me. Loved it.

How are you?

[mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com]

Thanks, to all. I hope you still like what I plan to do to all the characters in the end :)

I'm okay. It's been one of those long days, you know? *dramatic sigh*

[emeraldswan.livejournal.com]

Heh. One of these days you and I will have to have a conversation about my views on writing fics, chica. Believe me, it would take some major OOC behavior to make me not like your story...

Everything okay? I'm here, if ever you need to talk, rant, etc. Email (you have that, right?) or YiM, if you've got it. I'm the unoriginal emmy7792.

[mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com]

Things are fine. I just started the day at the gym, where I got another body composition test done. It wasn't what I'd call cheerful. Not surprising, but a little depressing. But on the upside, I have 133 pounds of fat-free mass! Go, bones, go.

With regard to my story: I'm waffling about if I need to have the NC17 section in a few chapters. I mean, on one hand, it's an Anita Blake story. On the other, I try to keep the fics at around a PG15 level for the kids.

I'm tempted to maybe write it and link it off the lj, so people can come visit to read if they're old enough. Not sure. Is it considered bad form to start writing a PG13 story then change to NC17 after 23 chapters?

[emeraldswan.livejournal.com]

I don't think so; most people understand that those things just happen. Though, if it's possible, you could always write two versions, the PG13 and the NC17, though I *always* have trouble doing that.

[emeraldswan.livejournal.com]

Oh, and I understand about the gym thing. Believe me. Right there with you.

[mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com]

I'm still not sure if it's essential to the story. The hardcore bits, I mean. I *could* cut it before we descend into rampant sex and then dart to the post-coital conversation. That would save the rating.

I'm trying to keep the extraneous writing to a minimum. All the story so far... okay, 99%, is essential to the plot. Three pages of Anita and JC having sex might not be completely necessary :P

[goddessvicky.livejournal.com]

Echo does what you're suggesting. She'll cut cut it out and put it in another post under it's own title. Like, Inevitable Interludes or something. That way if people want to read it, they can. I mean, if it's part of the story to you, you should write it. This way, you don't have to worry about the rating.

And this was an amazing chapter. I'm interested tolearn why the Aurors would be there, and especially what's up with Anita at the end. Very intriguing.

[deepfishy.livejournal.com]

A semi-cliffhanger! Oh no!
Great chapter - the plot thickens further. And what's happening with Anita? Really looking forward to more :)

[mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com]

Hey, they're all cliffhangers. Ending a chapter on a final note just seems... dull *eg*

And what's happening with Anita?

All in good time.

[cissasghost.livejournal.com]

I like how you finished this up - I wouldn't have thought of the "necromancers are scary" angle, but it fits perfectly with HP canon. Anita's issues are progressing nicely. I have to wonder what the American magical authorities are going to do when those Aurors don't report in on schedule . .

-Sonya

[mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com]

Thanks.

Anita's issues are progressing nicely.
More issues than National Geographic, that's our girl.

[beren-writes.livejournal.com]

Brilliant.

Over the last few chapters I want to alternatively hug and hit Anita - which I tend to want to do when I'm reading the books, so Bravo! :)

I do hope she bucks up a bit soon and/or stops being strong before she kills herself or someone else. So like her to reject comfort becuase of guilt.

I want to take Nathaniel and wrap him up in cotton wool until Anita can see beyond the end of her nose, and Micah so isn't helping. Richard is wonderfully Richard in his arsiness and it looks like there's going to be punch up sooner or later (probably a good idea to get it out of their system ::g::).

Poor Harry is being far too Gryffindor and taking it all on himself and he really needs a friend right now. I hope he and Nathaniel can help each other through the trauma that's going on - their talk seemed a bonding method for both of them.

Loved the whole lupanar scene, and the whole Bellatrix bit was fabulous. Harry's reaction was beautifully written as well. I like the fact that Jean-Claude is changing his opinon of Harry because of it.

Well done - great few chapters.

[mhalachaiswords.livejournal.com]

Over the last few chapters I want to alternatively hug and hit Anita - which I tend to want to do when I'm reading the books, so Bravo! :)

Then you're just going to love what I do in the next two chapters :)

I do hope she bucks up a bit soon and/or stops being strong before she kills herself or someone else. So like her to reject comfort becuase of guilt.

.... oh, something will happen soon. Hopefully before she kills someone.

I want to take Nathaniel and wrap him up in cotton wool until Anita can see beyond the end of her nose, and Micah so isn't helping.

I'll be going into this in a few chapters, but Micah's actions and reactions are not isolated or developing because he's a bit of a dick. Also keep in mind that Anita's irrationality isn't necessarily coming across as crazyness.

Richard is wonderfully Richard in his arsiness and it looks like there's going to be punch up sooner or later

let's just say that Richard's going to be kicked into gear soon.

Poor Harry is being far too Gryffindor and taking it all on himself and he really needs a friend right now. I hope he and Nathaniel can help each other through the trauma that's going on - their talk seemed a bonding method for both of them.

Nathaniel is really getting the brunt of all this. Anita thinks that she needs to drive him away to save him, but all she's sucueeding in doing is digging the knife a little deeper in him. I'm writing a scene now where we finally reach Nate's breaking point. It's not pretty.

Loved the whole lupanar scene, and the whole Bellatrix bit was fabulous. Harry's reaction was beautifully written as well. I like the fact that Jean-Claude is changing his opinon of Harry because of it.

Thanks :) JC orignally thought that Harry was just another modern teenager, but now he's seeing that Harry's not really a kid at all, and by actually sticking around and trying to clean up his messes, Harry's proving himself to JC.

Oh man, I need to get back to work :)